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modern era,

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more beneficial for needy

people

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few

people

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that free of charge services should be

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part of school subjects. I completely agree with

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importance

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stress in

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their

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lives so that if in school they study about some

charity

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and free services so they

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in future and

also

they

work

for blind and unhealthy

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small age so they all become more

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for their role in society , they not only help some needy or blind

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but

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they play

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role for countries growth.

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these skills in their schools so they find happiness easily to help

others

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and when they help

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give some good

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knowledge about these skills. In conclusion , schools play

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

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Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

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Example Question– Some people believe that unpaid community service should be a compulsory part of high school programmers' (for example working for a charity, improving the neighborhood or teaching sports to younger children). Do you agree or disagree?

Fully explain your ideas

On one hand, nuclear power provides cheap and clean energy. On the other hand, nuclear weapons are a potent threat to world peace. Do the benefits of nuclear technology outweigh the risks? Give your opinion and support it with reasons.

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Some businesses prohibit smoking in any of their offices. Some governments have banned smoking in all public places. Do you agree or disagree that this is the right course of action? Give reasons for your opinion.

Example Question–Some people believe that unpaid community service should be a compulsory part of high school programmers' (for example working for a charity, improving the neighborhood or teaching sports to younger children).Do you agree or disagree?