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Example Question– Some people believe that unpaid community service should be a compulsory part of high school programmers' (for example working for a charity, improving the neighborhood or teaching sports to younger children). Do you agree or disagree?

#question– #people #community #service #part #school #programmers #charity #neighborhood #sports #children
In
this
 modern era,
charity
 works
becomes
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 more beneficial for needy
people
also
 few
people
 think
similarly
 that free of charge services should be
necessary
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 part of school subjects. I completely agree with
this
 statement and I discuss the
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importance
imporatnce
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importance
 of
this
 change in upcoming passages. On the
first
 hand ,
people
 have
physically
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 stress in
thier
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their
the
 lives so that if in school they study about some
charity
work
 and free services so they
work
 for needy
people
 in future and
also
 they
work
 for blind and unhealthy
people
's development.
Moreover
 , if children study about some
charity
work
in
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 small age so they all become more
responsibile
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responsible
 for their role in society , they not only help some needy or blind
people
 but
also
 they play
vital
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 role for countries growth.
Furthermore
, if all students studied
about
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apply
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these skills in their schools so they find happiness easily to help
others
.
For instance
 , many
people
 know how to help other
people
 and when they help
others
than
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then
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other
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others
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 give some good
wishies
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wishes
wish
 so they make feel happy .
In addition
 , all
people
not
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do not
did not
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 have time for going to
fo
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do
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 some
charity
work
 for
others
 so they give some amount of money in
organisation
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the organisation
an organisation
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 to
hepling
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helping
 needy
people
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, therefore,
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therefore
 it is quite important to
having
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have
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 knowledge about these skills. In conclusion , schools play
vital
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a vital
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 role
to
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in
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individuals
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individuals'
individual's
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 growth
apartfrom
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apart from
 that it is
indispensable
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an indispensable
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 thing for doing to
others
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others'
other's
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 growth so
in
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,in
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 my opinion, it is very important for students and culture
also
.
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