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Band 5

Government should close companies that produce toxic waste materials without their own waste treatments facility in order to protect the environment. To what extent do you agree or disagree.

Authorities should ban facilities that generate harmful
waste
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 without
improper
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proper
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 measures for treatment in order to curb environmental pollution. I totally agree with
this
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, because toxic effluents have a great negative impact on the environment
which
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, which
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 in turn affects the habitat.
This
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 results in numerous health challenges for human beings and
also
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 livestock. In
this
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 essay, I will discuss extensively the demerits of
this
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 act to support my opinion.
Firstly
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, the lives of humans and animals are endangered by environmental pollution
which
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, which
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 is prevalent in our society.
This
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 has
wrecked
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wreaked
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lots of
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apply
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havoc on the health of humans and livestock.
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, improper management of harmful
waste
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 by
companies
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 should be curbed by
Government
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the Government
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and
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, and
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 erring facilities should be shut down to serve as a deterrent to others.
For instance
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, inhalation of toxic
waste
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 released into the environment predisposed people to lots of food and
water-born
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waterborne
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 illnesses
such
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 as typhoid and cholera. Apparently,
this
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 issue has contributed majorly to the unhygienic condition of our environment
which
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, which
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 in turn
lead
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leads
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 to life-threatening diseases.
According to
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 a survey carried out by NAFDAC in 2021 about toxic
wastes
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, it was observed that 55% of illnesses are from the consumption of contaminated
foods
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food
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 and water products.
Also
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, some domestic animals tend to feed on
this
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waste
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and
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, and
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this
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result
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results
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 in sickness and premature death.
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, Farmers are experiencing hard times
due to
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this
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 act by factories because toxic
wastes
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 have a huge negative impact on agricultural produce. Farm produce is greatly affected by these toxins
especially
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, especially
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 when a farm is close to the facility, thereby causing
reducing
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a reduction
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 in the yield of agricultural produce
which
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, which
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 in turn causes profit loss for farmers.
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, chemicals contained in these
wastes
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 could affect the growth of crops or even contaminate them. An example is a corn plantation close to a chemical-producing company in my locality. The produce was contaminated by toxic
wastes
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 and caused huge losses to the farmers .In view of
this
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,
Government
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the Government
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 should shut them
until
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down until
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 they do the needful. In conclusion, the significance of adequate effluent treatment can not be
over-emphasized
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overemphasised
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 as its contribution to social and economic growth. The majority of these
companies
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 must be
penalized
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penalised
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 to desist from
such
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 acts
and
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, and
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also
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sensitization
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sensitisation
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 programmes could be
organized
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organised
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 by the appropriate Authority too. In view of
this
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, there must be stringent policies and stiffer
punishment
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punishments
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 for
companies
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who
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that
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 engage in
such
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 heinous acts. I
also
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 recommend that the staff of these
companies
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should
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apply
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be trained to know the significance of proper
waste
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 management.

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Task Achievement
Your essay could start with a clear definition of toxic waste to help readers understand the topic better.
Coherence and Cohesion
Make sure you use linking words such as 'firstly', 'for instance', and 'in conclusion' consistently to improve flow.
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Expand on your examples to explain how they relate to your main argument more clearly.
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Your strong opinion is clear throughout the essay, which is a good point.
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You provided relevant examples that help to strengthen your arguments, showing a good understanding of the topic.

Word Count

IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 250 words in writing task 2. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.

A very long essay will not give you a higher band score.

Aim for between 260 to 290 words in writing task 2. This will ensure a concise essay and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 40 minutes to write the essay and you need around 10 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long essay in 30 minutes.

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