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Some people feel that with the rise of artificial intelligence,computers and robots of artificial intelligence, computers and robots will take over the roles of teachers. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement

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Most individuals are of the opinion that the increase in the rate of use
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 and artificial intelligence will render tutors redundant in future.I believe
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 is true as the level of development in gadgets and
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 has improved tremendously in our society. Teachers are
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nonchalant
 about the fact that
robots
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 and computers can end up replacing them,they recommend these
machineries
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 and gadgets to their pupils and students when they are tired or have no answers to some questions.
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 they use it while teaching.
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 is a welcomed development,it could result in unemployment, which could
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 lead to insecurities and hunger in many homes.
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 students could
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get so engaged
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 these gadgets or
robots
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 that they see no reason in going to class for studies.It is important to note that machines can never be human as there are some tasks that machines will not be able to perform as humans would. If we now have
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 that
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 humans and can be used as clone,
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 what relevance
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 our tutors hold,when they can be programmed/designed to teach subjects at a wider range and perform other services that teachers may not be able to render. Researchers must times browse the internet for information through their systems and get accurate results,
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 of visiting the sites for these
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.They carry
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 their projects which
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 visiting the locations while at home. In conclusion ,I would recommend that our teachers
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 themselves and study more as artificial intelligence and machines are gradually taking over the system and may replace them in the nearest future

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