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You work for an international company, and would like to spend six months working in its head office in another country. -explain why you want to work in the company’s head office for six months - say how your work could be done while you are away - ask for his/her help in arranging it

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Dear Mr Smith, I am writing to inquire to accept my appeal for
working
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in
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company's
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the company's
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 head office in Florida from March to
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September
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. In fact, some courses related to my
jah
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Jah
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 will be provided by American Accounting Association in Florida, I would like to
enroll
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 on these courses, which will be extremely useful for my career.
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, working in another country provide me
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this
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 opportunity to gain valuable experience
of
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in
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 business in
English
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 language. My assistant
have
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 been working with me since 6 months ago and she will
under take
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 my tasks if my request could be accepted.
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, some of my
works
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 will be done online from Florida in my free time. I have time to apply for these courses before February 6th. I would be extremely grateful if you could assist me
arranging
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this
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 transference to America. I appreciate your prompt attention regarding
to
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apply
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this
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 matter. Yours sincerely, Neda Mohammadi
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    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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