Some people believe that unpaid community service should be a compulsory part of high school programmers (for example working for a charity, improving the neighborhood or teaching sports to younger children). To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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, the main reason for shools is proper education of students
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sort of education teaches children that democracy should prevail in all stages of life so if we want to
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them to give people's aid by
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, it may be effective in the short term, but in the long term, it will teach them that it is possible to
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others to do things that they are not interested in doing.
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, In many Iranian schools, school- goers are forced to participate in religious ceremonies, while research in one of the country's schools showed that when students were forced to participate, 95% of them had attended the ceremony, and if it was optional, only 15% of them were presented.
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work will make children in adulthood, if they reach management positions,
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their employees to have interests and destroy creativity completely.
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, Not paying for the work done is effective if we teach the students what the benefits of
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type of activity are,
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children learn that they can bully and not pay for the work of others, while in the accurate culture of
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, employees' salaries should be paid on time and no one's rights should be lost.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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