some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. Others argue that it is better to try and improve such situations. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

Some people think that accept a bad
situation
such
as an unsatisfactory job or insufficient
of
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money. Others say that
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trying
tring
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trying
to improve that kind
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of situation
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is better.
Moreover
,
this
issue has been
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discussed
dicussed
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discussed
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in
modern
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generation. From my point of view,
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trying
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to improve
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the
this
ths
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this
situation
is better.
Besides
, some details will be discussed in the following paragraphs.
Firstly
,
from
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my perspective opinion,
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trying
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to deal with
the
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bad
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situation
stuation
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situation
can change your
life
. In spite of it is not very
appearently
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apparently
apparent
.
Furthermore
, you have
chance
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a chance
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to decide your
future
, like, jobs or schools.
For instance
, my little brother had a big
exam
before, that
exam
is related to the senior high school which you will study at . Every
students
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thinks
this
exam
is very important.
However
, my brother always
fail
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fails
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every
subjects
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subject
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in his middle and final
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. My parents and
me
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encourage him to prepare effort
of
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that
exam
.
Finally
, he progress a lot.
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hence
, he
study
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studies
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at the school which is his
first
choice. In conclusion,
try
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trying
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to improve the
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situation
stuation
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situation
can make you different
than
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from
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before.
On the other hand
, someone
say
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that it is best to accept a bad
situation
. From my point of view, it is more
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and easy than you try to deal
the
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problem.
Besides
, some people think that the salary can keep their
life
, it's enough. They don't need to do more best to change their
future
life
.
This
condition of
life
is steadily and easy
in
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their whole
life
To summarise,
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with
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these two views, I think the important reason
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people argue
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the
this
thes
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the
issue
is do
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they have some ambition. From my perspective, I would like to do my best to change my
future
life
and enjoy my entire
life
in the
future
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  • resilience
  • stoicism
  • contentment
  • cope
  • adapt
  • endure
  • persevere
  • settle
  • ambition
  • tenacious
  • determined
  • resourceful
  • optimistic
  • self-improvement
  • proactive
  • initiative
  • transform
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