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Should computer skills be considered as a part of the most important subjects besides reading, writing, maths?

#computer #skills #part #subjects #maths
Computer
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The computer
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 is a very essential part
in
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of
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 today's world.
Altough
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Although
, the world is leading
towards
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toward
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 Information Technology(IT) Sector.
Computer
skills
 should be considered
as
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an important
subject
. In
schools
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,schools
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 the
computer
subject
 is been taught but only once or twice a week,it should be
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teaching
teacher
 to students every single day like other subjects.
INDIA
 is booming
into
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in
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IT
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the IT
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 sector,the survey conducted in 2021
which
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shows
INDIA
 will have a growth of 70% by 2023 in the IT field.Foreign investors are investing in
INDIA
into
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in
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IT
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the IT
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 sector. Just because of the
computer
skills
 and hardcore practice we are watching
INDIA
 growing in IT sectors,as
government
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the government
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 is
also
 helping students with
scholarship
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scholarships
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 in
computer
releated
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related
 courses.
Computer
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The computer
A computer
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 has helped us a lot nowadays,you can mail in a
second
,you can do your projects,can create bills in a minute and many more.Most of the work is been done
in
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on
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computer
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the computer
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 itself nowadays. The
skills
 a student can learn in
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computer-related
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computer related
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computer-related
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 courses
is
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are
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 data analytics,cyber security,IT,Accounting and many
.
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others.
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Students should get
computer
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a computer
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 as a permanent
subject
 till the SSC.
Therefore
 ,
computer
skills
 should be considered
as
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an
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a
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an
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 important
subject
 as it helps to
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ease
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easy
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ease
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 your work in
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today's
todays
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today's
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 world , without
computer
 our work will get tougher.
Hence
,reading writing and maths are
also
 important having
computer
skills
 is
also
 very important.
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