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Some people think that government should invest money in wildlife projects and protect them.Other people think it is better invests money in other projects.Discuss both views and give your opinion.

#people #government #money #wildlife #projects
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In recent years,
people
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 have discussed
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where should the
government
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 invest
money
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into
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,
such
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 as
wildlife
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projects
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 or other
projects
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. Some
people
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 think that it is important to concern about the earth much more and we ought to invest more source into
wildlife
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projects
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. Other
people
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 think it is more necessary to develop the
economic
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. In my opinion, the
government
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 should separate the
resourcements
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resource meets
 in an appropriate way, including economic, education, public benefits and environmental conservation. The
government
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 has to care about every area of
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society in a limited way. We all know that the care from the
government
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 can not be comprehensive but initiated.
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 the
government
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 is able to invest little
money
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 in
wildlife
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projects
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, at least it does. So that
NGO
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NGOs
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 can initiate
people
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 to protect
wildlife
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 based on the strategy
from
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 the
government
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.
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, as long as the
government
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 invests
people
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 and
money
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 to maintain the environment of the mountain,
such
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 as picking up the trash or gathering the garbage to transport it, or even
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just setting up a public landfill.
People
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 will follow up
the
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 strategy made by the
government
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 and promote
the
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their
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 opinion to others. Asking others to follow the rules, before they went on hiking, they might invite others to use eco-friendly
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dinnerware
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dinner ware
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dinnerware
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. Try to use
reusable
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a reusable
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 canteen without
plastic
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a plastic
the plastic
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bottle
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. To sum up, the
government
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should
shoule
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should
 invest
money
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 in not only
wildlife
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 but
also
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 other
projects
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. It shows
that
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which issue should be concerned about
in
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these days. If the
government
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 really care about the whole society, it should take
account
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into account
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to
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all the area.
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