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Some people think traffic and housing problems in large cities can be solved by moving companies and factories and their employees to the countryside. To what extent do you agree or disagree with the this statement.

#people #traffic #cities #companies #factories #employees #countryside
It is true that the prominent reason
of
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 traffic
jam
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 and lack of housing in big
cities
come
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 from
exisiting
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existing
 of factories and
companies
 there,
therefore
public
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the public
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 may think that the obvious solution for
this
 problem
by
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moving
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 these out of the capital to the countryside and rural areas. I profoundly support
this
 point of view for several reasons. On one hand, giant
companies
 and large factories consider
this
 issue as a life or death matter, simply because they need to be in the major
cities
 for economic purposes,
firstly
, they have all
required
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 resources which might
be
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not
exisiting
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existing
 in
countryside
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the countryside
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,
secondly
, the transactions of import and export are much easier,
moreover
, being in major
cities
 opens more
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 opportunities for these
companies
 and diminish the cost of transportation and logistics.
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One
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 the other hand, if the governments are serious
in
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 encountering the critical
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challenges
challanges
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challenges
 in major
cities
, they should take
this
 proposal into consideration. Moving
factoires
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factories
 to the rural areas
not
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 only the solution for traffic
jam
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jams
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 and housing
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problems
porblems
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problems
 but
also
 will create more job opportunities in these territories,
therefore
 the rate of
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unemployment
unemployemnt
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unemployment
 will decrease,
furthermore
, it enhances the standards of living in these poor provinces.
This
 detrimental phenomenon of leaving
counrtysides
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countrysides
countryside
 without development and economic support
,
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 would lead us to immense problems in the future we will not be able to face. In conclusion, we must take an action and support all governmental efforts to move
companies
 and factories gradually to the countryside
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