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Some people say holding sport competitions can cause problems for the host country, other disagree. Discuss both the views and give your opinion.

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Numerous people believe that holding
sports
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competitions
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 can lead to a
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 of issues for the host country, while others disagree with that. In my experience, the host country can get both pros and cons when it organises international
sports
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competitions
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.
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 of all, there are two major advantages because of international
sports
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competitions
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. One major advantage is that national tourism has a great chance to develop itself in both quantity and quality.
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, there is an increase in the number of visitors during
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competitions
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 happening time, and there are
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 a
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 of international tourists who need high-quality services
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 as five-star hotels, and wonderful restaurants. Another major advantage is that the government has a special chance to make a
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 of international relationships widen and deeper.
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, it generates a
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 of chances to develop the economy and policy. In Seagames 20, my government signed many financial papers with Thailand.
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, organizing international game
competitions
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 can lead to 2 main problems. The
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 main problem is that it cost a huge budget to build infrastructures which serve competition.
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, Japan government spent 1 billion dollars building facilities which prepare for the Olympic 21st. The
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 big problem is the waste of facilities. A
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 of buildings are used only for
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 events. In the FIFA world cup 19, two huge stadiums were built in Brazil, but
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 they have demolished. In conclusion,
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 there are some drawbacks, numerous benefits are so appealing. In my opinion, these benefits have overweighed these drawbacks.
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