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Art is considered an essential part of all cultures throughout the world. However, these days fewer and fewer people appreciate art and turn their focus to science, technology and business.

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The notion of
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 is one of the important cultures in the world and promotes understanding and appreciation of our diverse cultures, stories, experiences and distinctiveness of personal opinions. But nowadays, most
people
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 are focusing on science,
technology
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 and
business
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. In
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’s interest in the
arts
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. The reason for
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 trend may involve the recognition that science,
technology
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 and
business
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 are playing a key role in economic growth.
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, there are some forms of scientific investigation of future problems of the Earth not being able to support the human population. Scientists innovated in order to conduct in-depth research on the future of humanity.
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,
people
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 focus on science more than
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.
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, on the one ,hand
technology
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 is a replacement of
people
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 with computers is an inevitable trend. On the other ,hand automation is a tool that can be used equally in all endeavours including
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 so that
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 concentrate on
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 more.
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, a
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 can boost the economy, increase its competitive edge and build a good reputation.
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 point,
people
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 are affected more by
business
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 than by
art
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. As a consequence, how could impact more
people
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 appreciate
art
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? We could educate
people
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 to understand the importance of the role of
art
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 better, and broaden their horizons, it is necessary to bear in mind the explicit and implied functions of
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. In the face of the increasing ignorance of the
arts
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, I suggest that the government should arrange different
art
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 exhibitions in public places. The place would be suggested downtown or central town centre. It is easier to seek
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 everywhere,
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plenty of space to advocate
people
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's interest in
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.
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, urge them to government build up more and more galleries or
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 museums, sometimes exclusive to offering free tickets, to give an
art
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 atmosphere surrounding everywhere. In conclusion, my view is that
people
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 should be encouraged to be
art
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-oriented, upgrade the facilities, and strive to endeavour
people
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 to take interest in
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.
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 the best way for them to get a clear perspective of what they are hoping to do with their
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 life.The human consciousness continues to incorporate ate these achievements into its activities by
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.
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