Government spending on restroration of old buildings in cities should be stopped. Instead they should spend money in housing and road development . Do you agree or disagree with this.

With the rise of post-materialism,
bread-and-butter
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issue has no longer significant for citizens.
Hence
, based on Maslow's theory, people start to focus on their mental satisfaction, which leads to the demand for
restroration
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restoration
of old
buildings
. That leads to a conflict:
whether
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government
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the government
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should invest
capitals
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in
this
field. From my perspective,
government
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the government
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should invest
for
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that, but in a proper way.
First
, it is reasonable to claim that
government
should not pay for fees of
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restoration
restroration
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the restroration
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of old
buildings
. Considering a nation's economy, it is not a rational action. The opportunity cost of
this
decision is so large that, with
this
amount of money,
government
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is able to establish more infrastructure projects,
such
as building
as
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real
estates
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which can increase the
government
income and stimulate
the
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economic growth.
Moreover
, the increase of spending
of
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restroration
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restoration
also
means the possibility of deficit
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existence
existance
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existence
increases, which is harmful to the country's monetary and international status.
However
, the
restroration
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restoration
of old
buildings
is still important. From
government's
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perspective, old
buildings
with
representation
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the representation
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of historical events can be recognised as a spot where
toutists
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tourists
prefer to visit, which, simultaneously, increases the
government
revenue;
therefore
, consumption could be enhanced and the risk of deficit can be ignored.
Thus
,
regional
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the regional
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economy can be improved while
government
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the government
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will actually be making profits.
In addition
,
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the public's
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public's
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satisfaction is of great significance for a democratic polity. In that case, local governments should try to
fulfill
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individuals' general will. Since people's preferences have changed, dwellers are attracted by old
buildings
with spiritual meanings where they can satisfy their mental needs and release pressure from
the
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society. In conclusion,
restroration
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restoration
of old
buildings
obtains more benefits than disadvantages -
government
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the government
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can have more income; individuals can be satisfied
; and
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a region's economy can be stimulated. Whereas,
risk
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of facing
deficit
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a deficit
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still exists;
thus
,
government
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the government
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should balance the investment properly.
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