You just read an article in an international travel magazine which contained some information about your town that is incorrect. Write a letter to the editor of the magazine. In your letter - correction the information in the article - explain why it is important for the magazine to give correct information - suggest what the magazine should do about this situation

Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing to inform you about misinformation about my town, which was published in your
magazine
, The Sunday Times,
last
Sunday, 18th July 2022.
Firstly
, I must say that the article about
Al-Aqsa
Mosque
, Palestine, was very well written, and it contained detailed information about the history of our city and the
mosque
. The mistake that the editor made in the article is the wrong location of the
mosque
. The
mosque
which is mentioned as
Al-Aqsa
Mosque
in your
magazine
is not the
Al-Aqsa
Mosque
.
Furthermore
, the pictures shown are
also
of the wrong
mosque
, and they need to be removed or corrected.
This
is so important to correct because
Al-Aqsa
Mosque
holds a strong cultural and religious importance for us, Palestinians, as well as Muslims in general.
Furthermore
, it will lead all the readers of your
magazine
to the wrong
mosque
, and they will not be able to perform the intended religious obligations which they need to offer in
Al-Aqsa
Mosque
.
Therefore
, I, on behalf of my town, am requesting you to replace the wrong location with the correct location of the
mosque
. I know the correction will require a huge amount of work for the editors and publishers of your
magazine
, but it will result in an overall increase in confidence in "The Sunday Times" for its diligent work. Looking forward to your positive response. Yours sincerely, Umair Khurshid Siddiqui
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