some people think reading stories in books is better than watching tv or playing computer games for children. to what extent do you agree or disagree?

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them,reading stories in
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and watching
tv
or playing
computer
games are good options for
children
to learn or pass their free time.With the development of technology nowadays everything has changed.In my opinion, I agree that
children
should read stories in books.I feel
this
way for two reasons which I will explain in the following paragraphs.
Firstly
,reading stories in
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is another feeling that you don't take by using a
computer
or
tv
.
Furthermore
,passing the paper one by one when you read and take notes is another satisfaction than you crab.
For instance
, when I was
children
my parents bought me a lot of
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as I remember now "Poor dad,Rich dad" which
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so useful for me after in my carrier and in my life.I read them day by day and took notes.Really when I remember now I
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started to cry.Still,my parents have my books in their library and
this
makes me e so happy.
Secondly
,using the
computer
or
tv
by
children
is not good for their eyes because the light that has them is dangerous for their
children
.
For example
,I have a cousin that started when he was five years old using a
computer
and
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near to
tv
always for series he watched before.After many months he wore glasses and he cried every moment because he didn't want them.Ok I am right with the
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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