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Advertising industry has a huge influence on the society. Do you agree or disagree?

#industry #influence #society
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In
this
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 modern era,
advertisement
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 has significant effects on the community, especially in businesses. In
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 essay, the reasons to support agreement in the
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viewpoint
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view point
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 will be elaborated
on
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in
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the
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 following paragraph including increased brand awareness, and profits before my conclusion
is
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 reached. To
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begins
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,
advertising
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the advertising
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 industry plays a key role in
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introducing
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introducing
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new products, which makes customers know more and more about the products.
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, in the
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 year of
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establishing
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establishing
 Flash,
logistic
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 company in Thailand, only
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of
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customers used the service from the Flash.
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, after they invested in
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advertisement
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an advertisement
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 by hiring
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famous influencers to be the ambassador, the number of customers dramatically surges up to a million ones in the
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 year.
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, it is able to make people aware of the brand.
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, the
advertisement
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 can persuade the feeling of consumers to buy the products as nowadays people decide to buy anything from the attractive
advertisement
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.
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, I decided to buy the BMW
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EV
cars
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 after I saw a lot of reviews from users
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on
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 Youtube, Facebook, and
Intragram
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Instagram
.
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, advertising can generate more profit
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 the business. According to the report from Havard University, the amount of profit increased
averagely
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50
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of 50
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percent
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percents
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per cent
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 compared to the companies without
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launching
lauching
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launching
 the
advertisement
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. In conclusion,
advertisement
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 has
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influential
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an influencial
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influencial
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influential
 impact on
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society due to raising awareness
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 the brand and
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increasing
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 the number of sales
as
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 the aforementioned reasons. In my opinion, I strongly agree with the statement.
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