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Some individual act in an anti-social way, such as committing the crime. What are the causes behind such behavior? What are some solutions?

#act #crime #behavior
Indeed for the
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 most
of
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the
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countries
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 been facing
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 biggest issue
is
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called Juvenile
delenquency
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delinquency
.
This
 is emerging as a serious social concern across the world. It is an alarming situation and it must be addressed immediately.
To begin
 with , there are several causes behind
this
 situation.
Firstly
, most of the young generation are vulnerable and adventurous in nature. So most of them want to do something different activities in
this
 life.
Initially
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 many
youth
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 want to know the thrill
regarding
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 killing. Unfortunately after their
first
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 they can not come out of that swamp.
Secondly
, we are living in a globalised era now we have numerous entertainment options like television,social
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media
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medias
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 and movies.
This
 has a dramatic influence on the child. Many children try to
immitate
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imitate
 the role of their
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superheroes
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super heroes
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superheroes
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 and became part of
the
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criminal activities.
Thirdly
, because of the influence of people around the child ,
the
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 kid
kid
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develop
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 a thirst to earn more and more for their future.
Therefore
 most of them find some
short cut
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 to richness by adopting criminal activities.
However
,there are several ways in which
this
 problem can be solved.
To begin
 with, creating awareness in children regarding the detrimental effects of crime can
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solve the issue up to a certain.
Next
 ,the child should show the miserable ends of their hero in movies .
Finally
,
government
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 should limit the number of aggressive channels or impart penalties on channels or movies
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 publish violent scenes. To conclude, it is certainly true that nowadays more children
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 become aggressive,it has
an adverse effects
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an adverse effect
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 on
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society.
Nevertheless
, few timely steps can solve the problem in
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 effective manner.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • upbringing
  • parental guidance
  • social norms
  • socio-economic factors
  • poverty
  • unemployment
  • inequality
  • peer pressure
  • mental health issues
  • substance abuse
  • desensitize
  • early intervention
  • consequences
  • law enforcement
  • justice system
  • deter
  • mental health services
  • treatment
  • positive role models
  • mentorship
  • community engagement
  • pro-social behavior
  • supportive environment
  • inclusiveness
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