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The maps below show the changes that have taken place at Queen Mary Hospital since its construction in 1960. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

The maps below show the changes that have taken place at Queen Mary Hospital since its construction in 1960. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant
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The maps depict the development of Queen Mary Hospital between 1960 and 2000.
Overall
, it should be clearly seen that Queen Mary Hospital changed from a mostly commercial
area
 to an
area
 with healthcare buildings. It is
also
 worth mentioning that
while
 the hospital,
the
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and the
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 car park remained, a pharmacy, a cancer
centre
 and a nursing school
were
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was
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 added over the period. In 1960, there
were
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was
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 only a shopping
centre
, a hospital, a car park and
a
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farmland.
However
, in 1980, the shopping
centre
in
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on
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 the West side of the
area
 was transformed into a cancer
centre
 and a pharmacy.
Likewise
, the farmland in the South-West of the
area
 was converted
to
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into
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 a Nursing school. In the following twenty years, the space of
cancer
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the cancer
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centre
 which was located
in
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on
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 the West side of the
area
was
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tripled. To the South-East of the
area
, the space of
car
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the car
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 park was halved for the relocation of the nursing school.
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Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words area, centre with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • infrastructural evolution
  • healthcare facilities
  • technological advancements
  • capacity expansion
  • modernization efforts
  • historical layout
  • landscape adaptation
  • access routes
  • renovation and improvement
  • initial structure
  • environmental considerations
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