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Some people believe that visitors to other countries should follow local customs and behaviour. Others disagree and think that the host country should welcome culture differences. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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Cultures can represent a variety of behaviours and customs. There were some allegations from
people
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 who believe that visitors should follow the
country
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 rules and the way they act, while others think it is better to have freedom and follow their own culture.
This
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why visitors can have the freedom of their choice.
To begin
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 with, there are those who believe that following the
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behaviour
bahaviour
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behaviour
 of the visited country is a must.
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 because terrorists tend to break the rules sometimes and miscommunicate.
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, a Mexican individual has decided to visit the United States, but he had a lack of resources on how to communicate with others.
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, he struggled
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 the information to
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. In the long run, he will end up being lonely, and
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 because he wasn't able to develop connections. Ultimately,
people
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 should have a decent background about other communities before visiting them.
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, there are allegations from the society that says it's better to treat visitors like they are in their hometown. From a
visitor
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 perspective, being in
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 culture can cause anxiety. Making them feel comfortable is the key to
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 them reduce their stress. To be more precise,
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, if a family just arrived
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 a country that they have no clue about,
thus
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 they will feel anxious. But, if
people
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 welcomed them and didn't act in a negative way towards them.
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, they will feel respected
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 the other community. If
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society kept
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 method of welcoming all types of cultures, so they will feel that they are valuable. In conclusion, after analysing both perspectives. I believe that
people
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 should treat all strangers as if they are in their hometown,
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 It is better to keep them mentally stable. Even though they might find
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difficulty
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 to communicate while being stressed out, so giving them freedom is the key to avoiding making travellers anxious.
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