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The threat of nuclear weapon maintains world peace. Nuclear power provides cheap and clean energy. The benefits of nuclear technology far outweigh the disadvantages. Do you agree or disagree?

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There has been a controversy about whether nuclear technology is advantageous to us. I agree with
this
 argument, and my reasons will be explained in the following paragraphs.
First
, it can better protect our environment. As we know, today's main
fuels
 are fossil
fuels
,
such
 as oil and coal; many machines rely on them to function.
However
, the greenhouse gases those fossil
fuels
 produce can worsen climate change to a large extent.
Besides
, they are non-renewable energy;
in other words
, they can be exhausted.
On the contrary
, unlike fossil
fuels
; nuclear
power
 is a clean resource, which is not detrimental to the environment.
Second
, it's more economical. It's expected that not all countries are self-reliant. Many countries have to import resources from other countries and the costs can be pricy.
For instance
, the current oil price is 99.67 per kg, plus the transportation fee, the total cost can be extremely expensive.
Besides
, the oil price is not fixed, it can be changed over time due to international economic circumstances. In
this
 case, nuclear
power
 doesn't cost much, and its price is relatively fixed. It's worth mentioning that the transportation and storage of nuclear
power
 are convenient. Most nuclear
power
 can be delivered once by
planes
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.
On the other hand
, nuclear technology can be considered dangerous.
For instance
, the
fuels
 the nuclear factories use are radiative, which are harmful to our bodies. Take the
Chernobyl
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Chornobyl
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 nuclear disaster as an example, which has been considered the most serious nuclear accident in human history. There were 56 people who died in the accident, and around 4,000 people died on account of absorbing poisonous nuclear
fuels
. In conclusion, I believe the merits of nuclear
power
 outstrip its demerits.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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