Some people think that spending a lot on holding weddings, birthday parties and other celebrations is just a waste of money. Others, however think that these are necessary for individuals and the society. Discuss both views.

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society tends to bring families and loved ones together. A few numbers
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people
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of the ideology that most ceremonies
such
as weddings, birthday parties and other
ocassions
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occasions
that
seems
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fit to be celebrated
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a waste of resources whereas others
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otherwise
. In
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I will elaborate on both views. Hosting
people
on various
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occasions
ocassions
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occasions
is of great value to
the
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society because it gives individuals great opportunities to change
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example , an invite to the United States for a wedding ceremony
it
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will glamour the invitee having
such
a
priviledge
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privilege
to explore
into
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another
country
. It powers
one
on
one
communication with families and friends who would
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the invitation as well.
Furthermore
, it creates revenue for the government
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raising funds used in the reconstruction and development of the
country
.
Also
, it strengthens the family bond amongst
one
another ,
consequently
,
one
can be able to bring
back
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new ideas back to their
country
. It enhanced
ones
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knowledge into knowing different cultures and settings of other
community
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communities
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or
country
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countries
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.
Also
, It exploits
ones
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knowledge about
new
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cuisine and
hence
, brings back memories.
Nothwithstanding
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, funds are been lost and sometimes
unforseen
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unforeseen
incident
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could occur .
For example
, in a situation
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invitees are been terrorized on
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way by
criminals
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it will
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people
's
emotion
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. Again due to the current economy some
people
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that saving
such
amount
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of money will affect
one
's financial status. In summary, regardless of the expenses that will surface and the negative beliefs of some
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I am of the opinion that coming together and supporting
one
another when necessary is paramount.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Financially burdensome
  • Unnecessary extravagance
  • Significant life events
  • Cultural traditions
  • Strengthen relationships
  • Community bonds
  • Memorable experiences
  • Investment in happiness
  • Lavish parties
  • Moderation
  • Excessive spending
  • Long-term investment
  • Honoring milestones
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