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Some people believe that professionals, such as doctors and engineers, should be required to work in the country where they did their training. Others believe they should be free to work in another country if they wish. Discuss views and give your own opinion

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Nowadays, many highly skilled professionals like doctors and engineers choose to leave the
country
 where they received
an
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education to find a better life. Others believe that those who have studied in
one
country
 should remain and
work
 there. It’s
in
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my belief that workers should be able to live and
work
 where they chose to. On
one
 hand,
practicing
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 and working where
one
 received
an
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education is a moral and ethical
duty
. A highly skilled professional has a
duty
 to give back to the
country
 where they learned.
This
duty
 includes
pay
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 back to the government as a form of tax and other financial benefits
in addition
 to providing the service to citizens.
Therefore
, those who studied in
one
 place should
work
 and give back to the
country
 where they learned.
Nonetheless
, everyone has a right to choose where they wish to
work
 or live. Not every
country
 provides safe and comfortable working conditions even for highly skilled professionals. Poor quality of life, low pay and low employment may become a reason why an individual would want to migrate to another
country
.
For instance
, in
Kazakhstan
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 it takes over 8 years and a lot of hard
work
 to receive medical education.
However
, doctors are paid the lowest salaries and are forced to
work
 many hours. I believe that people who put an immense amount of effort into studying should be allowed to
work
 and live where they find desirable. In conclusion,
while
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some individuals believe that professionals have a
duty
 to the government and people of the
country
 where they studied and trained.
However
, I argue that everyone has a choice of where to live and
work
 to meet their needs like working environment and high pay.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • professionals
  • doctors
  • engineers
  • required
  • training
  • home country
  • cultural
  • linguistic
  • advantages
  • economic impact
  • free
  • another country
  • globalization
  • international collaboration
  • improving
  • skills
  • knowledge
  • experience
  • opinion
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