Several languages are in danger of extinction because they are spoken by very small numbers of people. Some people say that government should spend public money on saving these languages, While others believe that would be a waste of money. Discuss both these views and give your opinion.

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Education
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is one of the pillars which helps any country to improve its economy. Some think it is important for any government to provide
education
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for free whether they are financially strong or not. In my perspective, I strongly disagree with
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statement because It is impossible for some countries to accommodate free
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,
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, students might take it for granted if
education
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is given for free. On the one hand, native
languages
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hold
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value of cultural diversity. To support
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statement, a variety of speeches represents different cultures' identities and gives an image of their culture to the entire globe.
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, traditional
languages
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help to preserve the history of society. Some epic books were written in old
languages
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, and if old speeches were lost, they
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affect the history of the nation.
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, The Gita was written in Sanskrit and now very few
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know how to read or speak Sanskrit.
On the other hand
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, saving traditional
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is not feasible because with the help of a small amount of
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it cannot
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. It is because of the teaching cost of language.
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, to teach the language, new educational infrastructure is needed
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maintenance of
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and teachers is
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required.
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,
people
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are not interested in learning less popular
languages
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. Especially, youth is now more attracted to international
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such
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as English and French, and
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because of globalisation.
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, most multinational companies give first priority to English speakers, which can be used all over the world. In conclusion, it is true that
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traditional
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hold a value of artistic identity and historical importance.
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, I personally think that the huge amount of cash from the national fund would be wasted by developing new educational structures and
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that
people
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are more interested in popular
languages
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.
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, the government should invest capital in the basic needs of
people
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rather than in language.
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