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Some feel that cities shold be designed to be beautiful while others feel their functionality is more important. Discuss both sides and give your own opinion.

#feel #cities #shold #functionality
The bar
chart
 describes the attendance of
girls
 in three-level different levels of
education
. The levels of
education
 are primary, secondary, and tertiary. In bar
chart
 compares developing and developed
countries
 in the period 1990 and 1998. The unit in the
chart
 is the
number
 of
girls
 per 100 boys. Overall, developed
countries
 have more
girls
 who attended in three-level different levels of
education
 than developing
countries
.
That is
 proved if developed
countries
 have more advanced in many aspects than developing
countries
. In detail, all
countries
 set their
girls
 to have primary
education
, seen clearly in the
chart
 not much different
number
.
Then
, developed
countries
 almost reach the target
number
 of
girls
 who attended secondary
education
.
However
 in developing
countries
, the
number
 of
girls
 who attended secondary
education
 starting decrease. The most erratic difference between developing
countries
 and developed
countries
 is the
number
 of
girls
 who attended tertiary
education
.
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    • Sentence 2 - Example
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Aesthetic appeal
  • Cultural heritage
  • Infrastructure
  • Urban planning
  • Sustainable development
  • Psychological well-being
  • Economic growth
  • Tourism industry
  • Architectural marvels
  • Public spaces
  • Accessibility
  • Environmental impact
  • Residential areas
  • Commercial hubs
  • Green spaces
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