In a number of countries some people think is necessary to spend large sums on money on constructing new railway lines for very fast trains between cities. Others believe the money should be spent on impriving existing public transport. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

These days a lot of
money
is spent on constructing new
railway
lines
for very fast trains between cities
instead
of improving existing public transport. Most of
this
money
comes
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taxes, which means it is,
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in fact
infact
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in fact
, the hard worked
money
of society.
Therefore
it is important to question which investment is the most
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beneficial
benefical
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beneficial
.
Firstly
, new
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railway
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rail way
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railway
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lines
might have a fewer impact on
Globalwarming
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Global warming
, as there a build to a completely new
standart
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standard
.While old
railway
lines
might only run on fossil fuels or oil,which are releasing tons of C02
emmissions
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emissions
, new
lines
will use green energy only.
Sunenergy
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Sun energy
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has no or only very little impact on our planet. A Train which runs by the energy of the sun is
therefore
very
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beneficial
benefical
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beneficial
for our Planet as it helps to prevent the Temperature rise of the earth
On the other
hand
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is the
constructions
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of completely new
railway
lines
very expensive and takes a lot of time. To Construct a new
transportstystem
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transport system
can take up to several years and can costs millions of
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Dollars
.
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for example
might be a burden for plenty
citizen
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, not only because the
money
could be spent on simply improving ….but as
these construction site
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might even cause more delays and issues in the old transport system as it would be if there would just
imporve
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improve
the old one. To conclude, the construction of new
railway
lines
is a helpful tool against global warming.
Nevertheless
am I of the Opinion that it is
money
and timewise more
benefical
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beneficial
to improve already existing ones. To a new
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standard
standart
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standard
.
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  • infrastructure
  • efficient
  • congestion
  • sustainable
  • environmentally friendly
  • connectivity
  • economic growth
  • public transportation
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