Governments should make people responsible for looking after their own local environment. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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with, governments may have stronger power when it comes to restricting
pollutions
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pollution
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. Compared to other non-government organizations
who
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can only educate the general public, governments can publish several policies to detect citizens from
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conducting
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conducing
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conducting
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events that may bring undesirable outcomes to the environment.
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, factories may need to pay for
extra
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fee if the
amount
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of harmful chemicals they produced
are
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out of
promise
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a promise
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.
Therefore
, the deterrent effect may be more powerful to prevent people from distorting the habitats.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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