The birth rate in most developed countries is predicted to begin to fall over the next 50 years. By 2030 it is estimated that over one third of the population in most developed countries will be aged 65 and over: What effects will these predictions have on developed countries if they prove true? What can be done now to deal with this situation? Give reason for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. Write at least 250 words.

There is no doubt that days that there is a study that indicates the number of births in some
countries
is declining. The question is, what effects on these
countries
if the study true? In
this
essay, I am going to discuss all impacts and solutions and draw my conclusion. In terms of problems, the developed
countries
will suffer from a shortage of births and in 2030 the population in these
countries
will be elderly. The main reason given to support
this
claim is that negatively effect on economic nation in terms of there are many vacancy jobs and no body have taken it. To illustrate, there will be not enough working hands, which is companies cannot industry their products and buy them. on the other
hands
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, the
countries
will be turning from rich
countries
to poor
countries
and
this
all will be
effecting
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on our future generation.
However
, action must be started to solve
this
issue.
Firstly
, the governments should encourage citizens to give birth.
on the other hand
, enhance their living situations which in turn provides aid for people to guarantee their
children
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future and make them can be stable
financial
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.
Secondly
, promote life insurance to support families.
This
is because people are afraid of having children due to their financial state. In conclusion,
this
study is very important for all
countries
on
this
planet and the governments must ensure that measures are put in place for
this
problem. Regarding developed
countries
, their governments should have taken serious steps to solve these issues
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