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Would you prefer to live in a traditional house or in a modern apartment building? Use specific reasons and details to support your choice.

#house #apartment #support #choice
If
i
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 would prefer to live in a traditional
house
 or in a modern apartment building, I think, I would hesitate to answer. From my point of
view
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this
 topic is
controversial
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a controversial
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 one. In the following
paragraph
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i
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I
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 will analyse both options, and present my view. Both options have some pros and cons.
Firstly
 if
i
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 consider modern apartment
building
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buildings
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, it is cheaper to live. The reasons are
apartments
 are somewhat smaller than traditional
houses
. So
apartments
 are easy to maintain.
Apartments
 have fewer and smaller rooms, so
i
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 do not need to buy expensive furniture.Whereas
generally
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houses
 are with big lobby area and greater no. of rooms
that
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means a greater amount of money is needed to make the
house
 impressive. Cleaning
apartments
 is
quick
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process
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 than cleaning a
house
 in which there is generally
need
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 of
house keepers
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housekeepers
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 who make our pockets tight.
On the other
hand
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 traditional
house
 has
also
lot
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 of benefits over
apartment
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an apartment
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 building. In a privacy manner,
Apartments
 are somewhat noisy whereas
houses
 are
kind
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 of peace centre because
apartments
 are
more
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denser than
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traditional
traditinal
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traditional
houses
 in their vicinity. In
houses
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 we can make our own pool and gyms but in
apartments
, it is not possible. In
apartments
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 we need to
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use
se
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see
common
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a common
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 pool and gym. From my point of view, I see both choices
favours
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 me in different phases of my life.
In
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 the age between 20-
30
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i
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 prefer to live in
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apartment
a partner
apartnet
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an apartnet
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 because
in
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at
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this
 age
i
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 am unmarried so
i
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 need less space to live and need to do household chores quickly and need more money to save or
for
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 invest for my family. On the other
hand
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 when
i
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 am married and have more
persons
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 in my family, I need
bigger
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a bigger
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 space.
Becuase
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Because
i
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 hope there
is
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are
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tons
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tones
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tonnes
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 of money
i
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 have at my marriage age, I need not
to
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worry
for
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about
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 the expenses to maintain
big
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the big
a big
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house
.
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