Several languages are in danger of extinction because they are spoken by very small numbers of people. Some people say that government should spend public money on saving these languages, While others believe that would be a waste of money. Discuss both these views and give your opinion.

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Some
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argue that
government
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should spend public expenditures to keep several minor
languages
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, which are about to extinct, spoken by a small number of
people
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.
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, others insist that it is
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way of public spending.
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who agree with these
languages
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should be supported by
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government
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money would argue that all
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are important tools to save precious
cultures
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to
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the
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generation. If the minor
languages
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are faced with extinction, the
cultures
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may not be succeeded in the future.
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, these
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are too minor to be spoken so
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they would be disappeared without protection
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the
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.
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,
people
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who speak these
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would be disregarded due to their
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. Meanwhile, there are several views that it is a waste of money.
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, there are too many
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spoken by a few numbers of ethnic communities.
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, the
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have to prioritize which
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to be saved in a limited amount of public spending.
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may cause controversial
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and unnecessary conflict among the communities.
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, the majority of
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, who used to speak these
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, may need to learn
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universal
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like English to make a living.
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, it would be more useful to spend public money
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education
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the common
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. In conclusion, I believe that public spending should not
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on
protection
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the protection
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on
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the
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minor
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. Though I understand the importance of traditional
cultures
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,
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government
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the government
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could invest the spending on education for the minority to acquire the universal
language
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to keep their
cultures
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in future.
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