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You recently travelled by train on a long journey and you experienced various problems. Write a letter to the train company’s head office. In your letter, – give the details of your journey, including the date, time and where you sat – explain the problems that happened and express your dissatisfaction – ask about what action will be taken to improve the service

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Dear Sir/Madam,
Last
 week on
twenty-fifth
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the twenty-fifth
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 of July, I travelled from Banaras to Delhi as a passenger on the
train
 Jan Shatabdi express PNR number 425-0034612 in
A-class
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 compartment presumably under your management. I experience several
inconvenience
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inconveniences
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 and problems throughout the long and strenuous journey. I would like to make an official complaint.
Firstly
, the
train
 was delayed one hour due to
malfunction
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a malfunction
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 with the door.
In addition
 to
this
,
train
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the train
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 had to stop several times throughout the journey due to technical issues. Due to
this
, I reached
to
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Delhi four hours late than
the
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planned.
Secondly
, the
train
 was overbooked, and my respective seat was broken, and I was shifted to
second
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 class compartment which was not clean as per the prescribed standards, doors locks were broken, and washroom
smell
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smells
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 were spread all over the compartment and on the top of
it
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 people were spitting on the floors. I hope that you can appreciate that I have had a terrible experience with your company, and I look forward to reading in your reply about what action you intend to take. Yours sincerely, Nidhi Anand
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