Nowadays, older people whoo need employment have to compete with younger people. What problem does this cause, and what are the solution?

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workforce
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became a competitive domain which is very hard to get
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workings
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,
older
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the older
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employer
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employers
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have to
work
with
youngster
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youngsters
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equally.
This
situation can create some problems including reducing
work
sprit
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spirit
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and
this
problem can be solved by separating their duty.
To begin
with, working two generations together can decrease working
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spirit
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sprit
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spirit
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.
Youngster
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are more fit to
work
speedily than
old
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the old
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tribe
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tribes
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.
Moreover
,
older
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an older
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citizen
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citizens
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who
need
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employment
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have
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not
ability
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the ability
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as much as
younger
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the younger
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have which can make a barrier to
work
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together
togther
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together
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, as a result,
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as a result
it can
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affect
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effect
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affect
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badly
on
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companies
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progress.
This
may lead
to
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a
company
to reduce
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their
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its
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profit.
For example
,
people
who are elder have less physical power than younger.
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practitioner
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practitioners
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said that at
the
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later age
peoples
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people
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lose their 60% health strength. By which I mean that an older citizen can not
work
like a younger pupil. Because of
this
, a
company
get
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a little
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little
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working hour to an older man which can curtail
company
development.
Therefore
, for
this
reason, working two
genesis
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together can
detrimental
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be detrimental
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for
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to
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company
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the company
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.
This
problem can be solved by separating their
duty
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regards
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to their age and capacity. Younger blood who are more powerful can
work
where the
company
needs a more capable person;
on the other hand
, older
people
whose
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worked
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work
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are more experienced and can
work
where the
company
requires a more skilled person.
This
may help to maintain working balance resulting in enlarged
people
who need to
work
can
worked
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work
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freely with youth and
also
company
have bo possibility to face deleterious condition.
For instance
,
in
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the transportation sector of a
company
can be maintained by youngsters and older
people
can be responsible for financial management departments. By doing these,
company
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the company
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will get
same
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the same
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working hours from two genesis as well as older
people
who need
work
can meet their demand. In conclusion, old
peoples
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people
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whom
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who
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need employment can find energy variation by working with old
people
. But
this
problem can be solved by dividing their responsibilities. In
last
, working with old and young
people
simultaneously can diminish the number of
unemployment
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unemployed
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.
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