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Families who send their children to private schools should not be required to pay taxes that support the state education system. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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It is believed by some that parents who have their children educated in private institutions should not be asked to support the public
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edu cation
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system
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 by paying taxes. From my perspective, I completely disagree with the viewpoints. One main problem which might arise from the issue is that it would be hard to calculate the number of funds which the government used to support the educational
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. In order to exempt those families from the
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 which is spent on
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, government staff can find it extremely difficult and time-consuming to proceed
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, and can even
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 encumber the government's burden.
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, supporting public
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 can be conducive to society as many talents can be cultivated through
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 and contribute to their professions in the future. Many doctors, scientists as well as scholars were receiving the
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 offered by the state
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made an exceptional contribution to the world and providing precious knowledge. It is clear to envisage that if these budgets spent on the
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 are curtailed or cancelled, many of the outstanding figures might have been stifled and lost their chance to
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society. Some who stand on the opposite side might assert that it is unnecessary for people to pay
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 subject that they will never need
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or
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 from it.
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, the truth is, an array of public structions or projects that one might never need still depend on the fund of
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, and
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, it is those progress that made people’s lives better and easier. National Defense,
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, some might argue that they will never
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 from it;
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 purchasing weapons and recruiting specialities would squander the resources.
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, evidently, it is the national defence which ensures the safety of its citizens from the invasion and attack of other entities. Though one will not
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 directly from it, it is still an indispensable part of
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 expense. In conclusion, I disagree with the viewpoint that families who have their children received private
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 have no obligation to support the public
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 through
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, as people might overlook the implication and function of the
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • tax exemption
  • public education
  • private schools
  • collective responsibility
  • societal welfare
  • equitable access
  • financial burden
  • social cohesion
  • tax credits
  • vouchers
  • subsidies
  • state-funded
  • socioeconomic disparities
  • public vs. private sector
  • quality of education
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