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Some people believe that nowadays we have too many choices To waht extend do you agree or disagree with this statement.

#people #choices #waht
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Opinions are divided as to whether
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sometimes
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agrued
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argued
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 that there are excessive options in our modern world. Despite the fact that we might be suffering
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overwhelming
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overwhelming
 choices but
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 believe that having a lot of choices would be more
advantages
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. On the one hand, In
this
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 day and age, the
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abundance
 of choices may do
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 than good.
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 of option,
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 on my own experience, when
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 wanted to buy food in
delivery
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the delivery
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 application,
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 was confronted with a vast of selections that
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 on my screen. There were Thai, Chinese,
Japan
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 and Italy food
also
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 various items that
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 had to choose
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the
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 regard caused me
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 and
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. Eventually,
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 did not buy anything because of overload
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of options
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.
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, plenty of selections would be
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in
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 society.These days, there are different types of
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transportation
transportion
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transportation
 which are available to go out with.
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 my mother told me that when she had to visit her mother, she had to
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train
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the train
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 for 10 hours but now we can go by using a number of mobilities
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 as
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, subway,
airplane
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 or any mode of transportation.
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, having variety
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selections
, which make people much
mor
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more
 comfortable. In conclusion,
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 can understand there are too
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 alternatives but it
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 to me
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that
tha
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that
 a large
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number
nuber
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number
 o options make life easier.
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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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