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The plans below show a student accommodation buildings 2010 and now. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant You should write at least 150 words.

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accommodation buildings for students in both 2010 and 2022. Overall, it is clear from the
plan
 that the architecture of the student building was been changed and some of the building parts were been improved in the new building. One key development is the fact, that the new building has more
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 old one,
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amount
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 of
student-bedrooms
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student bedrooms
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 from three to five.
Therefore
, the building from the
plan
 2022 contains a small en-suite room.
In addition
, near
this
 student
house
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 a car parking was built.
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, the plans show
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 house in comparison to the old version building, because
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another significant change is the absence of a living room. In the
plan
 of the student building from
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 the kitchen includes
also
 the social area, but the size of the kitchen stayed
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exactly
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exactly
 the same.
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 the garden area in the
plan
 from 2022 has been reduced.
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