You recently spent a night in a hotel and had to put up with a great deal of noise very early in the morning because of a faulty central heating system. The manager promised to contact you regarding compensation but you still haven't heard from him. Write a letter to the hotel. In the letter describe the problem at the hotel explain what the manager had said at the time say what you want the manager to do.

Dear Sir I am writing
this
letter regarding that we visit your
hotel
on 5 December and there were some problems in
this
date. I already told you that you had a serious issue in your
hotel
especially
Add the comma(s)
,especially

It appears that you are missing a comma or two with the interrupter especially in room 552 which was regarding the heating system which started early as 4 o’clock in the morning which caused that we did not have a good sleep also, my son had a sick due to that night. Consider adding the comma(s).

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in room 552 which was regarding the heating system which started early as 4 o’clock in the morning which caused that we did not have a good sleep
also
, my son had a sick due to that night.
However
, I discussed with
Mr.
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Mr

The abbreviated title Mr. seems to be punctuated incorrectly. Consider changing the punctuation.

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Ali About solving
this
situation and he agreed that we have the right to complain
in addition
to that, he promised that he will give us fair compensation and he told you will get a luxury suite at any time but, we did not get all these promises. I would like to get a new deal with
this
hotel
to forget all these suffer I need a cash compensation in the amount 5000$ or I will go to the ministry of tourism to take real measures with your
hotel
I look forward to hearing from you very soon
Submitted by alruhaimi6 on

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