“Some people think that Government should take measures to improve the health of its citizens. Others think it must be managed by individuals. Discuss both views and give your opinion”

It is true that in today's scenario, the epidemic diseases increase day by day and

individuals

face many problems

However

segment of society opine that authorities must take measures to enhance the medical

care

of its citizens Whereas rest of masses believe that it should be managed by youngster personally I favour former conviction .let us delve both

perspective

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perspectives

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with relevant example and conclusion To commence with ,

Firstly

, the government should improve the

health

care

of the

individuals

As a result

the spreading of diseases will

decreased

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and they get disease free environment

moreover

poverty-stricken people get better medical

care

so they can improve their lifestyle.

Secondly

, the authority should provide free

health

care

to their citizens so that everyone get treatment on time . An example, the Indian law

provide

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leisure

health

care

during

corona

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the corona

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pandemic

Additionally

, they

also

provide free vaccination to their masses and

also

in institutions .

Further

, they

also

organise some seminars regarding

health

care

so that youngsters must aware of their

health

. On other hand,

first

and foremost, if government improve

health

care

so other sectors of society lead behind and

also

have some economic problems.

Furthermore

, if

individuals

focus on their

health

, so low maker should be bemused on the education sector , transport sector and so on. Another striking point is,

,

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individuals

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that individuals

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start

concentration

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concentrating

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on their

health

and they start

exercise

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exercising

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in their daily routine ,

for example

, most

individuals

strat

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start

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do

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doing

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online exercise to see videos on YouTube which help them to become physically fit as well as

they

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improve their healthy diet . In conclusion , according to my point of ,view lawmakers should improve

health

care

because every individual can not able to afford

the

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experience

medical

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of medical

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care

, so government should organise some seminars

hence

, poor people are

also

aware of their

health

.