Writing task 2 Some people think that school children need to learn practical skills such as car maintenance or bank account management along with their academic subjects at school. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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number of people have the notion that
students
are required to train in practical skills like car repair or bank account management together with their intellectual subjects matter in school.
This
essay shall strongly endorse
this
perception and
thereafter
outline the reason for
this
occurrence after which a meaningful conclusion shall be made.
Firstly
additional knowledge outside their main studies is one of the enormous reasons individuals believe
students
needs
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practical skills.
This
is because, with the turn of events now, most people are heading towards what one can do practically and not theory.
As a result
of
this
, individuals who possess
this
quality are often given the
first
preference before others.
For example
, it has recently been published that,
students
with good grades in accounting and a year
experience
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in any reputable company can apply to Toyota Ghana for immediate employment.
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has
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cause
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qualifications to be employed reducing the unemployment levels. Quite apart from additional knowledge, a source of income
to
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the student is another factor that cannot be underestimated. A key factor to
this
is that
,
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there
students
after completing school will set up their own jobs
in addition
to the one they are doing and by so doing employ people to help.
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they have other means of getting money which they can use to supplement other things they need .
For instance
, in an interview with the CEO of Pent television, he has a carpentry workshop with over
15workers
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15 workers
where he
earn
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about 1500 thousand dollars every month.
This
he sometimes
use
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to pay some of the workers in the media industry.
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is really supporting him. In
conclusion
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after assessing the reasons
students
need practical skills, I can say without any reservations that, it will be of benefit to the country.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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