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A staggerin amount of food is wasted every year, both in businesses and households. Why is this happenig ? What can be be done to tackle this problem ?

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Food
 waste is very common nowadays, especially in the Western world. Households just
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 businesses are throwing a huge amount of
food
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the fact that it is still good.
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Therefore
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 is to wonder what's the reason for that and what can be done about it. In
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 I will provide some causes
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 his
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 and provide some solutions. A major cause
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this
problem
 is that our society has the tendency to buy more than they actually need, and
this
 as well counts for
food
. Most people go into the grocery store and buy way much than there need, ending up throwing half of it away by the end of the month. A way forward would be, to be more strategically about grocery shopping. Writing down a list of the absolute necessities could be a very helpful tool to reduce
food
 waste. A
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 cause
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this
problem
 is that the
production
 of
food
 overweighs the consumer's need for it.
Food
 factories these days have an almost never-ending
production
 rate, despite
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the fact that their product is already widespread on the market.
This
 has the consequence that plenty of
food
 ends up in the litter before it even got into the hand of the customer. To tackle
this
,
food
 companies might need a system that informs them regularly about the demand and stock of their products. As so, they could stop their
food
production
 occasionally until the demand rises again. To conclude,
food
 waste is caused by our
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consumer
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 more than necessary and by the imbalance of demand and supply in
food
production
. In my ,Opinion it is major
problem
 and if the Government don't act against it, no improvement will be reached.
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