Some people think that national sports teams and individual men and women who represent their country should be financially supported by the government. However, others argue that they should be funded by non-government sources (e.g. Business, scholarship, etc.). Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Numerous people think that national
sports
teams
and individuals, who present their countries, should be financially supported by the
government
, while others argue that non-
government
sources should
fund
them. In my experience, I agree with both arguments because of numerous reasons below.
First
, the
government
always plays important role in mental support. Most people love and are proud of their nations, so they are very happy if the national
government
do things appreciating their contributions. Financial support is not only meaningful but
also
realistic, because everyone has to earn a living.
For instance
, a female professional athlete, named Thuy, has lived in poverty, and her parents have lived in small houses with thatched-roof in the countryside. The
government
need to support them with money , so they can have a comfortable living. Regarding private organizations, there are two major benefits
as a result
of their
fund
, not only for receivers but
also
for them. The
first
benefit is that by funding national
sports
teams
, they can advertise their businesses to new clients,
additionally
, they
also
can increase the beloved of their current clients. One of my favourite companies is Hoa Phat. I knew it when it announced donating a
fund
for female soccer
teams
in 2017.
Second
, thanks to funds from private organizations, national
sports
teams
have enough budget to spend on their training, nutrition, and attending international events. In 2019, thanks to funds from Hoa Phat, our female team attended the FIFA cup, and
then
the
first
time they won it. In conclusion, both the
government
and private organisations should
fund
our national
sports
team due to a lot of advantages I mentioned above.
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