Some people think that success in sport is mainly depends on physical abilities while others think that there other important factors. Discuss both sides and give your opinion.

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individual, while in sports it depends on the
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great physics, while rest thinks there are more dominant factors to
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will be discussed and my opinion will be
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in the ensuing paragraph. On one hand, the abilities to be suitable in the field a
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to be physically active.
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which can enhance the performance.
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great strength to attack the opponent in their zone and to come back safely.
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, in athletes a good amount of stamina is required, it
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them to play for longer
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match a
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continuously
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in order to maintain the pace of the
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runs 10 to 11 kilometres in a match,
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helps them to play longer.
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, there are more vital elements for better performance in athletes
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game play
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and tactical skills. Most importantly
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is a natural ability which is linked to reflex action in humans and it makes a
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's performance unique.
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a participant requires
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good control over
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and dribbling skills which makes
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for
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the opponent
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to grab a bol. Apart from
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also
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needs tactical abilities to reach the goal. To recapitulate, to be a
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performer in sports it is important to have
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physical abilities, but in my
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playing and tactical skills can make a
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unique and difficult to defend.
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