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Should Newspaper not publish personal life of Politicians. DO you agree or disagree.

#newspaper #life #politicians
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graduated from Azerbaijan State Oil Industrial University (ASOIU) in 2020. During my academic life, I was part of the big societies
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SPE
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 ASOIU Student Chapter and
then
, SPE Azerbaijan, which helped me to grow as a
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specialist
 and expand my networking area. After graduation, I had a chance to try myself in
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 Mining Industry as an Engineer Coordinator.
This
 experience helped me to realize myself as a flexible
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and
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 open-minded individual, who has the
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ability
abillity
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ability
 to grow and contribute
my
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 team with
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new ideas.
Thus
, I decided to move
Turkey
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 in order to continue my desire to try myself in
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different
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 and get my
Master
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 Degree in a
top ranking
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 university. Currently, I
happy
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 to be part of
technical
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 support team in "Netcad Yazılım A.Ş". Our head office
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 in Ankara, Turkey. Netcad is a pioneer company which contributes
engineers
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to engineers
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 around the world with
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smart mining solutions. Having been developed by the common contribution of Turkish engineers, academicians, and
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users, Netcad is located at the core of
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 data ecosystem.
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