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In the future, nobody wiil buy printed newspapers or books because they will be able to read everything they want online without paying. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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Technology has impacted everything in our daily life. Among the changes, is the transition of the books, journals, and magazines from merely the store shelves to
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online platforms. To what extent will the readers in future pursue the uploaded versions, and abandon the traditional ones in return? It can be argued that
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 no one will prefer to buy hard copies, while they can have free access
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 the internet. Personally, I do not agree with
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financial support to
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, either to pay salaries or create products. Recently, the most prevalent pathway of funding
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 has been
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advertisements. It’s noticed that
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 the websites rely mostly on
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commercials as an income.
However
, in case the newspapers and books do just exist on the internet channels, I do not think that advertising can be the sole source of profit, since, the aim of any industry is to be profitable.
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sponsorship cannot apply to all sorts of visual goods.
For example
, sponsoring books may hinder the freedom and creativity of writers.
Moreover
, it would make the content less appealing, and undoubtedly, no one would like to come across some promotions
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 the pages while reading,
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 could happen. So, as far as I am concerned, I expect the presence of more extended forms of subscriptions and purchasing systems.
On the other hand
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online content will be the most popular form accepted by readers.
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convenience, and the ease of obtaining any piece of information by smoothly clicking some buttons. In an epilogue, I reckon that
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internet publishing is thriving,
however
, it is a romantic idea to obtain any service for free.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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