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Some people believe that the internet is used by all excessively. Do you agree this can have bad effect on children

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Using the
internet
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 has become increasingly important,
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, it should not be an addiction. Today, most children tend to spend a lot of time on it which is a big concern for parents. In my perspective, I completely agree with
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 statement because excessive time on the
internet
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 could lead to mental health issues and bad eyesight.
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 excessive use of the
internet
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 is wrong, some parents think children should be allowed to use it without any boundaries as long as they are working or reading on something productive.
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, it will help them to improve their knowledge pretty much faster than the rest.
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, most children who are learning coding as a language tend to spend a lot of time on computers.
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, some parents do allow to use the
internet
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 excessively despite its potential risk to their children`s health.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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