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Some people think that the government is responsible for the rise in childhood obesity, while others think it is the fault of the parents. Discuss both sides and give your opinion.

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Over the
last
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 century, there has been a significant increase in
children
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 that suffer
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obesity
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from obesity
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 and related health problems. Some people state that
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 issue comes from the wrong management in health administration sectors from governments, whilst others believe that
parents
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 are responsible. In
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 essay I will explain both points of view and why I consider that
parents
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 have the main responsibility. On the one hand, one of government health
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main
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job
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 is to educate societies in terms of generating healthy habits and promoting good nutrition facts.
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; they are expected to introduce
these knowledge
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 in schools and clubs for the young ones, so
children
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 can learn from early years the importance of sports and having a healthy diet.
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, every Saturday in Queensland there is a Fun Run for Kids, where the council organises different
sport
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 activities and provides healthy snacks for
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. Implementing those activities helps to fight against
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children
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childhood
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obesity
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.
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,
parents
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 are the main educators of their
children
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 and the ones that organise their diet and sport related activities.
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; kids tend to grow up imitating their
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, so it is expected that they will
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 mimic what they eat and how much sport they do.
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, recent studies from Harvard showed that
children
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 with athletic
parents
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 are 85% likely to have a healthy life, whilst 60% of
children
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 that grow
in
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 sedentary environments are expected to suffer from
obesity
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. In conclusion, whilst expert people from governments can promote and help
parents
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 to create healthy
rutines
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routines
 and meals for their
children
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, I believe that families are the
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responsible
responsibles
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responsible
in
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for
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 making it happen and teaching the young ones why it is important to follow good habits, in order to avoid
obesity
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.
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