some people believe that teenagers should be required to do unpaid community work in their free time. This can benefit teenagers and the community as well .to what extent do you agree or disagree?

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More and more individuals suggest that the younger have to
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a job internship program without wages in their spare time. I completely agree with
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because volunteering work can be fruitful for them as well. The
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reason why teens ought to join that kind of program
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social environment by the companies and institutions. In the better
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they meet new
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in all ages group and get acquaintances with many
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those who share the same interest with them. Helping
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can affect them in a positive way. The threshold matter, according to some research
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their internship
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have no salary is becoming a worker in those fields after
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program. The more they volunteered in some
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, the faster youngest find a job related to their afford. It
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gives them motivation to
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why teenagers make an appointment that which types of jobs
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more suitable for them, they are interested in it? The most important one
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to say is that the gaining new knowledge and experienced something which they haven’t had before. it is not given a chance to pursue their experience in another profession by school or college. If they have a chance, they could participate
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summer internship which
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isn’t related to their
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. To sum up,
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young adults can spend their leisure
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within it. In my point of view, they don’t have to miss
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • required
  • unpaid
  • community work
  • benefit
  • teenagers
  • life skills
  • volunteering
  • empathy
  • compassion
  • socially aware
  • responsible
  • interact
  • diverse backgrounds
  • cultural understanding
  • tolerance
  • work experience
  • essential skills
  • employment
  • interests
  • passions
  • career development
  • contribute
  • betterment
  • development
  • local community
  • mental well-being
  • stress
  • self-esteem
  • burden
  • academic
  • personal lives
  • time management
  • support
  • balance
  • participate
  • encouraged
  • numerous benefits
  • individuals
  • conclusion
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