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Doctors, nurses and teacher make a great contribution to society and should be payed more than entertainment and sport celebrities. Do you agree or disagree?

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absolutely not. I think it is a complicated job, and
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 dangerous. As a journalist,
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, natural disasters
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. One of my friends, named ICharl, has worked for a social media agency, in an advertising apartment. His team produced advertising videos about air conditions. 5) Well, I prefer listening rather than watching. Because of my work, my eyes are always exposed to artificial light, which can lead to numerous negative effects on my eyes. So they need to relax after
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work time. 4. I believe that the internet is the most popular source for getting
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 due to some reasons. According to a recent survey, my
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, Our wireless technology is very modern and stable. 2) No, I have never used it before. There are two reasons behind that.
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. You know. Nowadays there are a lot of convenient ways to get
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 as the internet or social media sites. 1) It is strange. In my living area, most
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 don't watch the
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 or read reports on Facebook.

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To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • critical role
  • healthcare professionals
  • societal well-being
  • disparity in income
  • skewed values
  • essential services
  • remuneration
  • mitigate
  • global shortages
  • inherent value
  • nurturing
  • compensation
  • societal contributions
  • profound impact
  • equitable distribution
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