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More and more young people from wealthy countries are spending time in communities in poorer countries doing unpaid work such as teaching or building houses. Why is this? Who benefits more from this, the communities or these young people?

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Community is always formed by the
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. Many children from developed
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 are performing work in under-developed societies
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 as educating
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 or in construction. It is because of the social responsibilities as well as educating others provides them self-happiness.
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 is more beneficial to society rather than to
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 involved in it. Social development will help everyone to treat equally. There are many
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 from the rich
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 helping the unwealthy nations by doing work for their country's improvement.
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, my cousin ran a business in India and visit African
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 to do social reformation work for the
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 in society. The youngsters from the wealthy
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 are contributing a lot to the development of poor
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. Education is the primary need for the
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. Individuals spend more time educating
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 for awareness which creates a huge impact on them to realize the value of education for the country's development.
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, I and my friends used to spend our holidays in Ghana educating
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 and teaching them, how to handle computers for their day-to-day activities. It helps them to create a different form of the country in front of other nations. Knowledge is a gift from god and will multiple when we share it with others. To conclude, adults are aware of their activities. They are utilizing their valuable time for the improvement of the
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 in society to create the environment by educating them without caring about their own benefits. We all need to involve in
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 activities.
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