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Band 5.5

Should governments spend more money on improving roads and highways, or should governments spend more money on improving public transportation (buses, trains, subways)? Why? Use specific reasons and details to develop your essay.

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Transportation of goods and services is paramount for every society but can
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 be easily carried out without proper
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 construction? While
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 ask if the government should spend funds more on
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 and highway maintenance or provide more capital in improving public transportation. In
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 I will state my views and reasons for that. Good
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 and improving railways should be taken into consideration by the government because goods and services can only be delivered safely if there's a good route for transporters.
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 in Nigeria , most perishable items
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 as fresh tomatoes, pepper and so on are been conveyed down to the east for
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 to buy and consume. But in the case whereby the
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 is not properly maintained most transporters will find it quite difficult to deliver food products.
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, due to the bad
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 most drivers find it difficult to go far because most funds realized from their businesses
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 channelled to repairing
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their vehicles leaving them with little or nothing.
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, poor service in conveying goods and services decreases, thereby making government not to be able to realize the appropriate revenue for the societies.
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,
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 will find it unbearable to travel on bad
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 because it could affect their lives and properties.
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, while on motion most times on bad
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 arm robberies takes
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 as advantages to harass and steal from
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 thereby making
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 to be scared in travelling far through by bad
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. ,
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 a few numbers of
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 find it comfortable travelling by
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 because it gives them the opportunity to see some different areas and as well explores to the new environment.
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, with the problem of insecurity together with poor
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 transporter will limit their movement in travelling to far places. ,
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people
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 will find it difficult to visit their loved ones ,especially during vacations and festive seasons. In summary, development of good
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 is essential for the interest of
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's businesses and lives.and moreso improving economic status.
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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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