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Many people believe that it is good idea to have dress code at work place. do you agree ?

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 in offices often wear clothes that are clean and formal. While some may believe that workers should have liberties in choosing their own
outfit
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, I believe that a
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 has to have a dress code to help Having a dress code is vital in the office setting because of a few things.
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, having either a dress code or a uniform shows the customer that the company has employees that are competent and in unison
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 their ideals. People tend to be more trusting
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 people who present themselves cleanly and elegantly.
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, I personally would choose to
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 with someone with a suit and tie rather than someone who is wearing cargo shorts in a meeting. Aside from that, dressing properly
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 prevents problems in the
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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