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In many countries, plastic containers have become more popular than ever. They are used in many businesses such as food and drink industry. Do you think the advantages of this outweigh its disadvantages.

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this
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 era,
plastic
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 is known to be a commonly used product in
day to day
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day-to-day
life
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, they are mainly productive for
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food
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the food
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 and drink industries. But in my view, even though there are practical reasons that can be an advantage for businesses and consumers,
in
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 other
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 the disadvantages could outweigh the advantages.
Plastic
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 keeps
food
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 and drinks safe from water, air and dirt
, the
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 material is made to
resist for
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withstand
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 a long duration and reduce
food
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 waste
,
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this
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 product is light, cheap and easy to carry. At the same time,
plastic
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 is
low cost
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low-cost
which
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 is clearly a good move from both
food
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 and drink companies.
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, in other views, the use of
plastic
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 could lead to serious health concerns for both animals and humans.
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, when
plastic
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 is heated or used for a long time, they release certain chemicals which could lead to cancer or other human health risks.
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,
plastic
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also
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lead
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leads
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 many marine
life
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 to risk, as animals think waste plasitc are
food
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sources
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source
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 and consume them, causing higher death rates in sea
life
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.
Futhermore
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Furthermore
,
plastic
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 causes environmental damages which is one way lead towards global warming
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 it is believed that
plastic
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 takes around
hundred
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a hundred
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 years to completely decay.
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,
while
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 plastics could bean advantage for
buisness
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business
 as they are light, cheap and very resistant, I believe the
disadvantage
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disadvantages
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 would
outweight
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outweigh
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 the advantages. As we should be concerned about the long term human health, marine
life
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 and environmental risk and the short term benefits they provide

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Make your main idea more clear in the first part. Say why the bad points are stronger from the start.
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Add one or two clear examples, like plastic bottles, food boxes, or sea animals. This will make your ideas stronger.
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Explain each point a bit more. Some ideas are good, but they need more support.
coherence and cohesion
Use shorter sentences. Some long sentences are hard to follow.
coherence and cohesion
Link ideas more clearly with simple words like first, also, however, and overall.
coherence and cohesion
Check pronouns and nouns. For example, use plastic is or plastics are in a clear way.
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You answer the question and give a clear opinion.
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You include both good and bad sides before giving your final view.
coherence and cohesion
Your essay has a clear start, middle, and end.
coherence and cohesion
Paragraphing is used well enough to separate ideas.
Fully explain your ideas

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • light
  • cheap
  • easy to carry
  • low cost
  • safe
  • last longer
  • food waste
  • single-use
  • throw away
  • plastic waste
  • pollution
  • rivers and seas
  • harm animals
  • recycle
  • limited
  • costly
  • reuse
  • short-term benefit
  • long-term harm
  • environment
  • public health
  • greener options
  • packaging
  • container
  • food storage
  • transport
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