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The growing number of overweight people is putting a strain on the health care system in an effort to deal with the health issues involved. Some people think that the best way to deal with this problem is to introduce more physical education lesions in the school curriculum. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Obesity and being overweight is
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 increasingly worrying concern for people worldwide, especially in the younger population. While many people believe that physical education in the school setting,
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is not the only factor in helping children control their
weight
.
This
 essay argues that physical education along with other factors
such
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 sleep and proper diet can help remedy
weight
 problems in kids today. Having an active lifestyle is one of the key aspects
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 having a healthy body. Proper
exercise
 thirty minutes a day for at least three times a week can greatly reduce
weight
, as well as helping muscles grow and
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 the heart in good shape. Having
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activities
activites
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activities
 in
school
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such
 as basketball, football, or tennis helps to keep the child active, and provides
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motivation
motiviation
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motivation
 by having other students play with them. While having adequate
exercise
 is indeed important
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 the overall health of a person,
this
 is not the only thing needed for an individual to lose
weight
. A balanced and proper diet is a critical aspect
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 keeping one's
weight
 in check.
For instance
, a person who exercises daily, but still eats heavy meals along with snacks in between will have a hard time getting fit. Another thing needed is good sleep, as things
such
 as stress and fatigue can lead to increased food intake, as well as decreased motivation to
exercise
. In conclusion,
exercise
 is vital in helping children get fit, particularly in the school setting;
however
, a balanced diet and good sleeping habits are
also
 needed in order to get fit. The essay described why physical education is not the only thing needed to remedy the problem of obesity.
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